Pretty sure 1:38 is ったな, like a contracted ってはな or even 言ったな (you said it, preach)
I hear 1:58 being contracted into どれん too.
Also OP you can't use *speaks with his mouth full* in a transcription, you have to figure out what he says. I'll edit my post when I have. Here are my corrections:
2:16 バレと思って焦った
2:19 危なかったね
3:27 定時ニュースです
3:28 ... ルシス王国
3:35 ... 無政府状態になっていた音に
3:36 ... 機構が設立されることが決まりました
3:40 ... 機構所属する人員は
3:46 政府関係者以外
Also you should break line 54 and 88 in two because they're too long and don't display properly on my player (vlc).
Will only proofread up to minute 4.
I hear 1:58 being contracted into どれん too.
Also OP you can't use *speaks with his mouth full* in a transcription, you have to figure out what he says. I'll edit my post when I have. Here are my corrections:
2:16 バレと思って焦った
2:19 危なかったね
3:27 定時ニュースです
3:28 ... ルシス王国
3:35 ... 無政府状態になっていた音に
3:36 ... 機構が設立されることが決まりました
3:40 ... 機構所属する人員は
3:46 政府関係者以外
Also you should break line 54 and 88 in two because they're too long and don't display properly on my player (vlc).
Will only proofread up to minute 4.
Edited: 2016-06-13, 11:13 am